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「I have my best friend. Her name is carol. 」= 又长
又闷.. 要改 「She is very kind and happy.」 = 佢系个开心果
英文用cheerful. 「 She *** iles all day.」= 成日咁开心系用always呢~~~ => Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely *** ile always. 「When I am in a bad mood. She will fort me. When I am happy. She will share with my joy. 」=又长
又闷.. 要改 ==> 其实讲来讲去咪系「分享」/「照顾」....... => No matter I am happy or in a bad mood
she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me). 「She likes playing puter games. We love to talk to each other about PC games.」 = 因为>> 你地中意一齐倾电脑games
先至会分享
所以=大家都中意啦. 而且
里句又长
又闷.. 要改. 唔洗前后出现puter games同埋PC games啦 => As we like playing puter games a lot
we share our thoughts always. 「Sometimes she helps me to do homework.」= 如果真系佢帮
唔系唔得
不过话晒功课就唔好咁写. 话佢教你做功课会好啲. 「 She is good at English. She always gets good marks in it. She is the first of my class.」 = 里两句次序唔改有啲怪.. 不如先讲佢成绩好
所以教你会好啲.. logically啲. => She is good (IN) English with (high marking). As her enblish is ranked as the best in my class
she teaches me doing homework sometimes. 2007-04-27 02:52:19 补充： 整句第一part :Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely *** ile always. No matter I am happy or in a bad mood
she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me). As we like playing puter games a lot
we share our thoughts always. 2007-04-27 02:53:31 补充： 整句第2part : 因为太多句
加个连接词好啲.(Besides)
She is good (IN) English with (high marking). As her english is ranked as the best in my class
she teaches me doing homework sometimes. 2007-04-27 02:55:14 补充： 整句第一part : (另一写法 留意最后一句)Carol is my best friend. She is very kind and cheerful with lovely *** ile always. No matter I am happy or in a bad mood
she always (share interests with me) / (takes care me). (Moreover
) we like playing puter games a lot (and share) our thoughts always.
参考: as my knowledge
Hope I can help you... I discover that many wers above are wrong... My best friend is Carol. She is always kind and happy. She *** iles all day. When I am in a bad mood
she forts me. When I am happy
I share with her my joy. She likes playing puter games. We love to chat about PC games. Sometimes she helps me with the homework. She is good at English. She always gets satisfactory marks in tests. Her academic result is the first in my class. I hope our friendship will last forever.
参考: me
Carol is my best friend. She always *** ile and kind to everyone. She will fort me when I am down and share my joy when I am happy. PC game is our mon subject for chats. She helps me to do homework too. Her English is good and her score is top in our class. I treasure our friendship to last forever. 大部份用原意，简化写法。直接。减低扣分机会。
参考: my 40 years experience with foreigners
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I have a best friend. Her name is Carol. She is very kind and happy. She *** iles all days. When i am in a bad mood. She will fort me. When i am happy. She will share with my joy. She likes playing puter games. We love to talk to each other about PC games. Sometimes she helps me to do homework. She is good at English. She always gets good marks in it and she is the first of my class. I hope our friendship will last forever. Your writting is clear and concise:) If you are a middle schooler
you should be proud of your English. Just try to connect similar ideas with conjunctions
such as and
or
for example e Doing that will improve your writting. ok :)
carol is my best
she is a happy girl and always has *** ile on her face. whenever i'm not happy
she forts me. and when i'm happy
i like to share my joy with her. she likes to play puter games and PC games is our mon conversation. i often ask help on hw from her. she always get a high mark in english and she is ranked to be the first in my class. i hope our friendship will last forever.
Carol is my best friend. She always very happy
she *** iles all day. She is very kind too.When I am in a bad mood
she will fort me. When I am happy
I will share my joy with her. She likes playing puter games. We love to talk to each other about PC games. Carol is good at English
she always get high marks in tests
she is the first in our class. Sometimes she teachs me to do homeworks. I hope our friendship will last forever. 改好了! 其实你几年班，要作d 咁既野.... 我改左少少内容，就系唔好咁直接话佢帮你做功课，话佢教你呀嘛，咁老师就会高兴d xDD Grammar 都无咩唔arm ，就系有d唔通顺。 英文呢d野睇多d，听多d就得嫁啦，唔一定好辛苦既 唔肯定100% arm
有错再继续改啦.... =]
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适合小学生跳的舞蹈
中低年级的小女生就跳T-ARA的Bo Peep Bo Peep。男生跳Super Junior SORRY' SORRY。高年级女生就跳MISS-A的Bad Girl Good Girl 或是少女时代的说出你的愿望。男生跳SHINEE的RING DING DONG或LUCIFER，第二个稍微难点，那就跳第一个吧。扩展资料：跳舞不仅能让人变得更聪明，它还能起到预防认知障碍症的作用。研究表明，跳舞能将人们患上认知障碍症的风险降低76%。这是因为，跳舞能同时调动大脑中多个区域的神经功能，有效地锻炼了手眼协调能力。参考资料来源：人民网-跳舞让人变得更聪明！大脑喜欢的6种运动
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元旦联欢会
材料：一人准备几瓶或一瓶饮料，一些吃的，奖品，还要准备一些惩罚的东西。装饰教室的东西。
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甲：新年的钟声即将敲响,时光的车轮又留下了一道深深的印痕。伴随着冬日里温暖的阳光，满怀着喜悦的心情，2011年元旦如约而至
乙：新年拉近了我们成长的距离
甲：新年染红了我们快乐的生活
乙：新年让我们截取下了四季的片段
甲：新年给了我们人生的禅想
乙：在这一刻，我们已经感受到了春的气息
甲：今天，我们相聚在这里，享受缘分带给我们的欢乐，享受这段美好时光
乙：今天，我们相聚在这里，一起用心来感受真情，用爱来融化冰雪
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甲：今天，我们欢聚一堂、载歌载舞
乙：今天，我们激情满怀、心潮澎湃
甲：今天，我们送去我们的祝福
乙：带着祝愿、带着嘱托
甲：埋藏已久的期盼，化做今日相逢的喜悦
乙：看，阳光灿烂，那是新年绚丽的色彩
甲：听，金钟朗朗，这是新年动人的旋律
合：在诗与画流动的佳节里我欲邀同来一起庆贺快乐的节日。2011年元旦联欢会现在开始！
甲：首先，有请***来为大家吹奏长笛《歌唱祖国》......
（表演）
乙：然后，有请***、***来一起为大家表演一个小品《校长来了》.....
（表演）
甲：下面，让...和...为大家献上一首歌：《挪威的森林》
乙：美妙的歌曲欣赏完了，那么，我们现在有请***演小品《戒烟》《军装时装秀》
甲：时装秀看完了，那我们有请***吹口琴《真的爱你》
........（就按你上面讲的就行了）
甲：虽然我们无法阻拦时间的流逝，但是我们可以主宰自己的心情
乙：妍丽的鲜花祝你节日愉快；闪动的烛光祝你平安如意
甲：怀念万千祝福在这充满喜悦的佳节里，祝福串成一首诗、组成一曲旋律、开启一片温馨的心灵
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乙：今天的联欢会更加体现出我们是一个充满活力，面向未来的集体
甲：在这里，有默默耕耘的辛勤园丁，有孜孜以求的莘莘学子
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甲：在这里，有我们对生活的激情，更有我们对未来的渴望
合：因为，我们始终相信：明天会更好
乙：今天的联欢会到此结束，再次祝大家新年快乐，万事如意，心想事成 ！
大家帮忙晚会串词。。
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5．都说世上只有妈妈好，有妈的孩子是块宝．
是啊！歌儿里就这么唱的！
那怎么没歌唱咱爸的啊？
因为爸爸的爱总是深沉的，不过今儿就来了一位．有请 演唱《父亲》．
舞蹈：
1．竹板这么一打呀！是别的咱不夸．．．
哎，没看出来你还会打快板啊？
那当然！不过你见过跳快板舞的吗？
那还真没见过！
接下来有请 为大家带来《快板舞》表演．
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3．都说民族的就是世界的，咱们中国姑娘们甩起的红手绢，抖起的花扇子，总是那么喜庆，无不体现了咱中国一派繁荣昌盛的景象！接下来请欣赏 舞蹈《喜乐年华》
4．卧似一张弓站，似一棵松，不动不摇坐如钟，走路一阵风！
南拳和北腿少林武当功，太极八卦连环掌中华有神功！
哎，你说的还真没错！这太极可是咱中国源远流长的文化之一啊！如今由太极演变迩来的有什么太极扇啊！太极球啊．．等等等等，既可以锻炼身体，有可以将中国的文化发扬光大，实在是好创意啊！
好！那接下来就请大家欣赏一端太极扇表演．有请！
5．说起着中国文化，就不得不提起赫赫有名的秦王秦始皇了．接下来就请欣赏 带来的《秦王点兵》
小品：
1．不知道大家还记不记得春节联欢晚会上那让人笑到肚子疼的小品，就是那个有宋丹丹和赵本山表演的那个访谈类的那个小品，叫什么来着？－《小崔说事》－ 对！今天小崔不就来了．．．
2．俗话说：一日为师，终身为父．瞧！今天这小徒弟就围绕着师傅的这多功能安全帽产生了疑问．有请＿＿带来小品《师傅的“多功能”安全帽》
相声：
这相声可是咱的国粹
哎，你说的还真没错！
现在那个特火的那个相声演员，那个挺胖的光头叫什么来着？
你说的是郭得刚吧！
哎，对！对！就是他！人家现在可是火了！还是说明咱国粹有魅力啊！
那好！接下来就让你欣赏段国粹！请欣赏相声表演《瞧，这两个爹》
杂技：
咱这儿真是藏龙卧虎啊！你看这说相声的演小品的，唱歌的跳舞的，真是五花八门啊！
哎！接下来啊，还有个更绝的呢！
请欣赏＿＿的口技表演．有请！
